20. William Yoshida

Dear William,
Your Freakonomics book report was very interesting. I really liked how you quoted the five main topics of the book but I thought that just the examples provided from the book were kind of confusing. I also thought that you could have provided less details and more explanation as to why those examples were provided for the topic of the chapter. I also liked how you inserted your thoughts to the last chapter and what your reactions and emotions were to reading it. But I think that you should have kept it consistent, either have dont it for all the chapters or not at all and added your reaction to another paragraph.There were really few grammar mistakes but there were some confusing parts but not so confusing that you couldn't understand. Overall, you did a really good job. It was really well written and the book was really well summarized.

Your Outliers book report was also very interesting. I think that in the beginning of the report, you should have stated the book and the author even though it could have been inferred. I also thought that it was very helpful how you summarized each chapter/section and wrote it in the order. But I think that it would have been easier to understand if you had explained how each explanation fit into each opportunity written by Gladwell. It was also lacking transitions in certain parts but overall, it was smooth and flowed. I also would have really liked it if you had developed your last paragraph a little more, explaining your reaction to your book more fully. But your summary was very detailed and thoroughly summarized, which is not a bad thing but rather very impressive. You did a really great job with the summary and was written very well.

-Rachel(: